Hi, Maddie! “In the bright, hot, sun, sand shining in the light, stuck between my toes.” Was a great short poem. I could see the scene you created with just a few words, and the title really completed it. I love how descriptive you can be with only a few lines. I enjoyed reading this work and I might suggest that you do more poems like this is the future. Haikus are indeed quite difficult. I struggled to cram meaning, imagery, and good writing into mine when I wrote them and they just ended up being somewhat overcomplicated. But yours are simplified and fun to read. Thanks for using your talent on such a fun poem! And it is definitely a relief and a breath of fresh air to have sometimes light and lovely instead of the dark and depressing things I commonly have to read, thank you for sharing! Stay Awesome, Taylor Denton
Hi, Maddie!
ReplyDelete“In the bright, hot, sun, sand shining in the light, stuck between my toes.” Was a great short poem. I could see the scene you created with just a few words, and the title really completed it. I love how descriptive you can be with only a few lines. I enjoyed reading this work and I might suggest that you do more poems like this is the future. Haikus are indeed quite difficult. I struggled to cram meaning, imagery, and good writing into mine when I wrote them and they just ended up being somewhat overcomplicated. But yours are simplified and fun to read. Thanks for using your talent on such a fun poem! And it is definitely a relief and a breath of fresh air to have sometimes light and lovely instead of the dark and depressing things I commonly have to read, thank you for sharing!
Stay Awesome,
Taylor Denton