Hi, Maddie! Now, I myself really struggled with this poem when I wrote it. I found it difficult to write and hard to connect to. I think mine turned out to be pretty unexciting and dull, but your poem is another story .You really managed to connect all the types of the paint colors and weave them gracefully into the poem. I could not do this, but you have already acquired a mastery of writing that many people spend decades trying to perfect. You’re extremely creative. I loved the line, “But harsh like the deepest wine.” It really gave me an image of the painting I believe you created. It’s been said that writes paint with their words, and I really think this is the case for you. Awesome job. I also appreciated the image you included at the bottom with all the various colors of purple, it gives a person an idea of what colors you were describing. You’re Lovely, Taylor Denton
Why do I feel like this belongs in a Victorian era story? People were kind of obsessed with flowers and their beauty and what they meant in that time, so I suppose it's because you describe this flower in such a pretty way. I just feel like going up to some mountaintops and smelling this "rock rose" because you illustrated it so well. The imagery is great because I can hear, smell, and see this entire scene with how you've laid it out. It's a simple and pretty piece, not using too many words to say too little, and I like this short poem overall. Describing and being in awe of nature is always a great subject of writing, and you do this incredibly well in this piece. You incorporated each paint piece in a way that didn't feel forced, and you weaved each stanza in a clever way.
I can see (and smell and feel) the scene you've described.
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ReplyDeleteNow, I myself really struggled with this poem when I wrote it. I found it difficult to write and hard to connect to. I think mine turned out to be pretty unexciting and dull, but your poem is another story .You really managed to connect all the types of the paint colors and weave them gracefully into the poem. I could not do this, but you have already acquired a mastery of writing that many people spend decades trying to perfect. You’re extremely creative. I loved the line, “But harsh like the deepest wine.” It really gave me an image of the painting I believe you created. It’s been said that writes paint with their words, and I really think this is the case for you. Awesome job. I also appreciated the image you included at the bottom with all the various colors of purple, it gives a person an idea of what colors you were describing.
You’re Lovely,
Taylor Denton
Why do I feel like this belongs in a Victorian era story? People were kind of obsessed with flowers and their beauty and what they meant in that time, so I suppose it's because you describe this flower in such a pretty way. I just feel like going up to some mountaintops and smelling this "rock rose" because you illustrated it so well. The imagery is great because I can hear, smell, and see this entire scene with how you've laid it out. It's a simple and pretty piece, not using too many words to say too little, and I like this short poem overall. Describing and being in awe of nature is always a great subject of writing, and you do this incredibly well in this piece. You incorporated each paint piece in a way that didn't feel forced, and you weaved each stanza in a clever way.
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